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A Vizzed-Up Story: Chapter 1

 

10-05-13 09:09 PM
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This is a story about Vizzed members I'm starting, inspired by tgags123. Here's chapter one. I have made an intro, but as that's optional to read, I'm not going to link you to it, sorry. If you'd like to read it, PM me or find it. This is a story I'll make up as I go. These'll be shorts that won't be that good.

Chapter 1: The "Viz"itor

Finally, I was out of that stupid orphanage. I can now roam wherever I want to. Although, I'm pretty sure Mr. Hedge, the orphanage director, wants me back. Too bad for him, I'll just hide somewhere. I have my skateboard, right?

But where should I go?

I skate around the area, which is mostly just forest area near a city. I start going in deeper and deeper, trying to isolate myself from the city. It gets quieter and quieter. Less and less noises. Until I finally just stop somewhere where it's utter silence. When I try to skate deeper in, my skateboard unusually snaps in two. What's going on? I mumble to myself under my breath and walk in further.

The farther I go the more I want to turn around. It's too quiet. Like it's some trap. I feel an unusual aura around the premises of it all. My soul tugged and tugged onto me, as if to tell me to turn around. Should I? ...Nah. Not in the mood to. I've come in far already, and to tell you the truth, I forgot where to go. Suddenly, I feel a sharp, strong feeling on the back of my head. I hear a soft voice behind me, that says something to the effect of, "Don't worry, kid, this won't hurt too much..." I feel like I'm bleeding, as everything becomes darker...

And darker...

And darker...

And darker...

Until it's pitch black.

When I wake up, I'm in some bed, covered with some smooth blanket. Is this a... leaf? I'm terrified at this point. I just want to leap out and kill myself, but curiosity takes me over. I walk out, and I look around. I see a figure, a little bit shorter than me. Looks like a teenager, around 14. He looks like I shouldn't be awake, and takes me out side of what seems to be a house, cave, thing. He takes me out to a city, and I agree to walk around for no reason with him. He could be leading me to some predator. We talk, and become nice friends. I was the first to ask something, identity wise.

"So, spit it out, man: Who ARE you?" I ask, more forcefully than I should have.

"Just call me tgags," he replied slyly.

"Why was I in a bed in that cave-" I say, being cut off.

"Oh, quiet. Let's go talk over a meal or two, I'm starving," tgags says.

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How is this turning out? I know, this is VERY bland and terribly boring. But it will get better, trust me. Tell me if it's pretty good, or pretty bad. Tell me what I need to improve on.

tgags123 : You kidnapped me, and now you're my best friend. Heehee.
This is a story about Vizzed members I'm starting, inspired by tgags123. Here's chapter one. I have made an intro, but as that's optional to read, I'm not going to link you to it, sorry. If you'd like to read it, PM me or find it. This is a story I'll make up as I go. These'll be shorts that won't be that good.

Chapter 1: The "Viz"itor

Finally, I was out of that stupid orphanage. I can now roam wherever I want to. Although, I'm pretty sure Mr. Hedge, the orphanage director, wants me back. Too bad for him, I'll just hide somewhere. I have my skateboard, right?

But where should I go?

I skate around the area, which is mostly just forest area near a city. I start going in deeper and deeper, trying to isolate myself from the city. It gets quieter and quieter. Less and less noises. Until I finally just stop somewhere where it's utter silence. When I try to skate deeper in, my skateboard unusually snaps in two. What's going on? I mumble to myself under my breath and walk in further.

The farther I go the more I want to turn around. It's too quiet. Like it's some trap. I feel an unusual aura around the premises of it all. My soul tugged and tugged onto me, as if to tell me to turn around. Should I? ...Nah. Not in the mood to. I've come in far already, and to tell you the truth, I forgot where to go. Suddenly, I feel a sharp, strong feeling on the back of my head. I hear a soft voice behind me, that says something to the effect of, "Don't worry, kid, this won't hurt too much..." I feel like I'm bleeding, as everything becomes darker...

And darker...

And darker...

And darker...

Until it's pitch black.

When I wake up, I'm in some bed, covered with some smooth blanket. Is this a... leaf? I'm terrified at this point. I just want to leap out and kill myself, but curiosity takes me over. I walk out, and I look around. I see a figure, a little bit shorter than me. Looks like a teenager, around 14. He looks like I shouldn't be awake, and takes me out side of what seems to be a house, cave, thing. He takes me out to a city, and I agree to walk around for no reason with him. He could be leading me to some predator. We talk, and become nice friends. I was the first to ask something, identity wise.

"So, spit it out, man: Who ARE you?" I ask, more forcefully than I should have.

"Just call me tgags," he replied slyly.

"Why was I in a bed in that cave-" I say, being cut off.

"Oh, quiet. Let's go talk over a meal or two, I'm starving," tgags says.

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How is this turning out? I know, this is VERY bland and terribly boring. But it will get better, trust me. Tell me if it's pretty good, or pretty bad. Tell me what I need to improve on.

tgags123 : You kidnapped me, and now you're my best friend. Heehee.
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10-05-13 09:09 PM
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goodboy : Nice, this is pretty good! It was interesting. Could you find a place for me?
goodboy : Nice, this is pretty good! It was interesting. Could you find a place for me?
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Wow, this is good.

I wish my mind would allow me to write things that make sense as a story. But no. It only spews out random stuff.

I hope I can find a spot somehow... I'll find a way to make you add me in the story! MWAHAHAHA!
Wow, this is good.

I wish my mind would allow me to write things that make sense as a story. But no. It only spews out random stuff.

I hope I can find a spot somehow... I'll find a way to make you add me in the story! MWAHAHAHA!
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10-05-13 09:13 PM
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Barathemos :

No worries, pal! I'll fit you into the story as I go along! I was planning to add a lot of members, you definitely being one. You'll be in here, somewhere. Do you wanna be a good or bad guy? Or should I decide?

Singelli :

Forgot to summon you to the original post... Lol. Sorry.
Barathemos :

No worries, pal! I'll fit you into the story as I go along! I was planning to add a lot of members, you definitely being one. You'll be in here, somewhere. Do you wanna be a good or bad guy? Or should I decide?

Singelli :

Forgot to summon you to the original post... Lol. Sorry.
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goodboy : Thanks! I would want to be a bad guy. I am that kind of guy.
goodboy : Thanks! I would want to be a bad guy. I am that kind of guy.
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Good job with this! Mine is better though. Why would I kidnap you? Hmm...
I have an idea. About something that could be cool. I will PM you.
Good job with this! Mine is better though. Why would I kidnap you? Hmm...
I have an idea. About something that could be cool. I will PM you.
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Barathemos :

Hehe, naw! You seem like a really awesome person, really! But you can be the bad guy, as you wish.

tgags123 :

Of course yours is better! Thanks! I'm gonna see where this goes. And I'd appreciate an idea!
Barathemos :

Hehe, naw! You seem like a really awesome person, really! But you can be the bad guy, as you wish.

tgags123 :

Of course yours is better! Thanks! I'm gonna see where this goes. And I'd appreciate an idea!
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I don't suppose you're going to play some kind of Queentress and knightboy gag in the later stories, are you? xD
I don't suppose you're going to play some kind of Queentress and knightboy gag in the later stories, are you? xD
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Mistress :

...

Maybe.

C'mon, I have to! Queentress and Knightbob shall be a running gag throughout the series, now!

EDIT: Knightboy... Not knightbob.
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C'mon, I have to! Queentress and Knightbob shall be a running gag throughout the series, now!

EDIT: Knightboy... Not knightbob.
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(edited by goodboy on 10-05-13 09:55 PM)    

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BAHAHA! Knightbob? Is that a mysterious twin brother that I have never met before?

I'll be looking forward to it.
BAHAHA! Knightbob? Is that a mysterious twin brother that I have never met before?

I'll be looking forward to it.
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This is pretty good man, I think you made a pretty awesome story here! This has such an interesting plot and storyline. I would love to be in your story if you could find a place for me, I would definitely read it. 


I don't think I would ever be able to write something so creative and awesome like this story. This is just simply amazing. Nice job man! I don't think this is boring at all, I think it is pretty funny the way tgags kidnapped you and he is your best friend. Good job and I hope you make another chapter to this, I would love to be in it, keep up the awesome work as always man! 
This is pretty good man, I think you made a pretty awesome story here! This has such an interesting plot and storyline. I would love to be in your story if you could find a place for me, I would definitely read it. 


I don't think I would ever be able to write something so creative and awesome like this story. This is just simply amazing. Nice job man! I don't think this is boring at all, I think it is pretty funny the way tgags kidnapped you and he is your best friend. Good job and I hope you make another chapter to this, I would love to be in it, keep up the awesome work as always man! 
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That's pretty crazy.  I can't wait to see where it goes next!  I may even create me one of these soon :-)
That's pretty crazy.  I can't wait to see where it goes next!  I may even create me one of these soon :-)
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(edited by supernerd117 on 10-05-13 10:47 PM)    

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Razor-987 :

Thanks for all that feedback! I'm so glad you found it that good! I didn't expect someone to like it as much as you all are. I can't thank you enough! And don't worry, I'll find you somewhere in the story.

supernerd117 :

Hehehe, yep! Gonna see if I can write more. And go for it! Would be interesting to read.
Razor-987 :

Thanks for all that feedback! I'm so glad you found it that good! I didn't expect someone to like it as much as you all are. I can't thank you enough! And don't worry, I'll find you somewhere in the story.

supernerd117 :

Hehehe, yep! Gonna see if I can write more. And go for it! Would be interesting to read.
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