A story dedicated to a retired global moderator KG : Enjoy








Chapter 1: Health Scare








It all started on a sunny day. KG was just watching TV when she felt a sharp pain in her chest so she heads down to the hospital to get looked at. They take an X-ray and think she may have asthma so they keep KG for onservation and give her an oxygen mask to assist with her breathing. About a day later the results come back negative for asthma so KG is sent home with an oxygen mask to use just in case she needs it.








Chapter 2: A turn for the worst








The next day KG's health takes a turn for the worst so she heads back to the hospital and finds out the results where mixed up and that she does have asthma. They keep KG confined to a hospital bed with an oxygen mask for 3 days to help her get better.








Chapter 3: The great promotion








While KG was in the hospital she received a PM from davideo7 that he was stepping down from vizzed and was giving KG to become board owner. "Hello KG my wife says I'm spending too much time and money on vizzed board so I'm giving you the opportunity to run vizzed board. Everything should be in your name and I'm gonna send a copy of the book I used to learn coding. I just need your address so I can send it to you. If you need help I'm reachable at AIM as Davideo77"








KG was very happy about this. She says to herself. Local Moderator Global moderator and now owner











Chapter 4: The end








2 years later KG is running a succesful vizzed board and has her asthma contained with oxygen treatments when she needs it and at night.

The story really didn't make much sense, and it kinda jumps around. First off, the asthma doesn't add anything of interest. And saying that finding out you have asthma is a "turn for the worst" is being a tad melodramatic. Sure I'd rather not have asthma, but it's not the end of the world.

Second, the mixup with the hospital could've been fleshed out, or cut entirely. There was nothing to it.

Finally, the "promotion" to owner of Vizzed came out of nowhere and was really boring. I would've have preferred it if the story had started out with KG always dreaming of becoming the owner of a video game website that illegally distributes roms primarily to children. Then you should've had her do something crazy, like convince David to kill his wife and then blackmail him into giving her the website. Basically anything other than just having his wife nag him until he gave it away.

The only thing I liked about this story at all was that it starred KG. And honestly, this was not one of her better performances. I'll blame that on the terrible script, though. She did alright.

I think this story is okay, I mean it is a little unexpected to have results of asthma and then become the owner of vizzed all of the sudden, but I think you can make it work, it was kind of weird how it transitioned from having results and then getting the message from davideo7. I think it is cool how he lets you become owner but it was just a little weird from going from hospital to being owner and...it was a little weird but okay I guess.

You could have twisted things up by making the introduction or the beginning of the story different like KG goes to extremes to become the owner instead of Davideo just giving it up.

soxfan849 : Gosh that is pretty extreme, killing his own wife and then getting blackmailed, that is horrible but funny the way you said it, that would definitely change the story up...maybe not in a good way.....

Well a story about a retired global becoming the owner that doesn't draw much appeal it was very boring no offense but i'm sure that it could turn out to be way better it was really straight forward for how the owner stepped down all because of his wife said so i'm sure if a owner of a website just like this stepped down all the money and effort would be lost so buying the website would be pointless.