This is the magical world of Booakia Here lives Bloopy a little cat who has adventures every day. Let's go!

Bloopy was sitting at home talking to his big brother Booky-Booky. Bloopy- Booky Let's play a game! Booky-Booky Replied with- Shall we go to candy town? Bloopy- Yes Yes! So they went to Candy town. Underway they met the Bagia brothers. They loved to compete. The Bagia brothers and Bloopy and Booky-Booky were at the same age. The big brothers at age 13 at the Little brothers at age 9.The little Bagia brother named Vizaniel. Said this: ?Hey you 2 are the Vizzer brothers right? Bloopy then said No we're going to Candy-Land and candy land only. Booky-Booky however had other plans. Booky-Booky said- Yes we are better in everything. Bloopy- But booky we are going to candy land. Booky-Booky replied with- Yes we are but that can wait til later. The big brother of the Bagia brothers named Fandia said. We can beat you at football! (soccer) Booky-Booky- Oh yeah Let's go then! The match begun even tough bloopy did not like that he had to wait to go to candy land he was a big fan of football (soccer) The Bagia brothers started with the ball Vizaniel had the ball he passed it to Fandia. Fandia was lighting quick and dodged Bloopy easily Booky-Booky was the goal keeper. Vizaniel played dirty he distracted Booky-Booky from the ball. Vizaniel- HERE LOOK HERE. he was jumping around. So the ball went in to the net. 1-0 for the Bagia brothers! Then bloopy felt something he never felt before He had the ball and from the middle-line he shot the ball in to the net. 1-1! Then the bagia brothers started with the ball again. But the ball got stolen by Booky-Booky who was running from his goal. Bloopy was running toward the net of the bagia brothers Booky-Booky passed and GOAL!!!!!! that was the end of the match 2-1 for the Vizzer brothers. Vizaniel ?was not very happy with the outcome he said: It was just luck! Then the bagia brothers ran off. Then Booky-Booky and bloopy had a great day in candy-land.

imamonster : nice new story you have there monster ^^! candy-land sounds awesome and i can't wait for the next chapter also i can't wait for "Imamonster and the Viz Warriors.'!

greenluigi :
imamonster : You two realize that the rules have been updated right? imamonsters initial post breaks several of the rules in the rule thread, please edit your post accordingly after reading the rules. Otherwise this thread will have to be closed and removed.

Frodlex : Wich rules have i broken. please tell me. PLEASE

imamonster : starting a new series eh ok i like it its kinda silly

kirbmanboggle : Lol this is supposed to be a bit cutesey so...

imamonster : yea i know i kinda like cutesie but i won't in a little while

kirbmanboggle : Hahahaha.  Ah well i hope you enjoyed. im glad if you did

Why not simply go to the rule thread and see for yourself? I'll even link you if it helps. I mean it's not like it's hard or anything, as for trouble? Don't worry about it, the rules are new, I mean I only updated them yesterday so don't worry about it, it's more or less a heads up for you. not me trying to be too hard on you or anything, just keep at it and all that.

Also I may as well be clear, you broke the "No layout in story post" rule, and rule #4. If you would like any help editing your post to fit the rules I would be more than happy to give you a hand.

https://www.vizzed.com/boards/thread.php?id=74472

Frodlex : Can you help me? I don't really know how lol.

Sure, I'm a bit busy right now actually but just hold up on posting any new stories and chapter until I get around to helping you out here, it won't be too terribly long or anything, you could even look up on google something along the lines of "How to properly space paragraphs and dialog." and that should give you a decent explanation, but I can go ahead and remove your layout now for one.

Also two members hit their 500 post in this thread, interesting don't you think?

Frodlex : Hahaha yeah you're right. 2 members hit their 500th post here LOL.

Dude, enough sandwich posting, it's against the rules. To be clear sandwich posting is essentially when you post, someone else posts, and then you post again and again, I mean your post quality is even terrible barely going over 10 words half the time, enough is enough dude, there is no actual reason for you to even respond to my last comment, if you continue I'm not going to warn you again. Please stop.

Why don't you go to Google and study some proper spacing tools for your story? It'll make it so much better, as it stands now it's just one block of text, and I'm telling you no one really likes to read that.