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Prologue: "Hmm....." A man by the name of Mohammedroxx3, Mohammed for short, was in a dark cove looking for treasures. Mohammed was an adventurous character that was eager to go anywhere as long as it was a thriller. Mohammed was along side his friend, Mr. Zed, who was Blacksmith for the king of Mohammed and Zed's kingdom...Mohammed and Zed were both together in the cove. Mohammed was tall and had wits and courage, and had special powers because of a special stone the kingdom shared...the Kotorkea Gem. This stone granted powers to everyone in Mohammed's kingdom. Even the king...Mohammed paused to find a gold stone that had an ancient code on it. "What's this?" Zed asked? "I have no idea...let's investigate it," Mohammed said bravely. The stone shined as Zed picked it up. Then they both heard an echoing scream. "Mohammed, you need to stop eating those pizza bagels if they're giving you stomach problems!" "That wasn't me," Mohammed replied. They then heard the scream again, this time closer. And closer. Suddenly, out of nowhere came a vicious looking creature that was drooling a pool! It was a wolf standing on its hind legs. As if it were a human. It had red eyes, sharp fangs, and a lot of fur. Then, the wolf skimmed towards Mohammed and revealed his sharp claws and scratched Mohammed on his arm. "Ah!" Cried Mohammed. There was a blood marks revealed, and they had to heal it. The wolf grabbed the gold stone from Zed and went out of the cove. That was the screaming beast. The blood marks revealed a message in a different language known as Gujavo. They knew a guy who could translate, however... Mohammed and Zed escaped the Cove. They had to get back to "Toyku Castle." Toyku was their kingdom, owned by king Razor-987. The kingdom produced beautiful plants, the greenest grass, and top notch security around the castle. Before entering the castle, they ran into PacManandMariofan! "Pac," Yelled Zed! "Thank goodness you're here. We need your help! Can you translate this? It's in Gujavo, and we know you can speak Gujavo fluently. "......." "Um...Pac?" Asked Mohammed? Pac had pink eyes, and he looked out of it. Pac couldn't say a word but stand there like a zombie. He was guarding the entrance to the castle, so they couldn't get in....Pac looked as if he'd been lobotomized...he was brainwashed..."What's going on?" Mohammed asked? Pac said nothing, so Mohammed and Zed just entered the castle to find the king throwing a tantrum, while the butler, MechaMento, was just standing next to his throne completely calm, holding a platter holding a seasoned turkey. "Sorry, guys, but since the princess has been missing, the king hasn't been able to keep his cool," said MechaMento still as calm as ever. "However, the king and everyone in the kingdom thinks Barathemos has done it. Look at poor Barathemos tied up, almost gonna be dunked in that boiling cauldron." "Let me go! I didn't kidnap the princess! It was a strange wolf that could stand on his hind legs!" "Not to mention," Mecha continuted, "that Pacman had been brainwashed by a mutant creature that is classified to be a prehistoric dinosaur...that can also stand." Mohammed was realizing all the havoc done in the kingdom. If it was not stopped, something worse would happen. He had an idea. "I know how to end this. If I can translate this scratched mark, I can find out what to do! The king won't know, because he and the residents are trying to kill Barathemos!" "Zed," Mecha said, "Mohammed should go alone. "But..." "No. You need to work full time as a guard, because it appears one of the guards has gone missing. Go...and Mohammed..that mark says...ye who is troubled in another universe must come to strike all enemies and get a bright stone to find out what sacred code is...to save Toyku." "That's it? Alright, I'll go through the portal to Earth." This was a whole new universe, and they could warp to other universes using colorful messes of portals. "Wish me luck..." Chapter 1: A New Hero "Haha. What do we have here?" A rough voice said. "He wants his books back!" A group of bullies were bullying a kid known as A user of this. "Give me back my book, DenzGamer135! I need it for my book report! "Well too bad!" A user of this was a kid that was known as the Whiz. He was a straight A student, being 13 years of age, he had glasses, which he got made fun of for a lot, and he was a very poetic mind and his maturity level is "off the chart" as parents say. A user of this was the bully magnet though, and his mother died at birth, so life has been very hard for him. A user of this has had thoughts of suicide at times, but has been stopped by his father, which is an alcoholic, and also abuses his own son. DenzGamer, the most popular kid in their school, West Ridge. He was super athletic, was really handsome, and never got any good grades, but he was still the ladies man, unlike A user of this, which did not care, because he was only 13, but Denz was 14. Denz was still depriving A user of this of his book, until...a figure that best describes Mohammed appeared and used his sword to scare Denz off by almost cutting his limbs off. Denz gave back the book, and A user of this was happy again. The savior of User was none other than Mohammed himself. User was scared to death by Mohammed, and Mohammed was a bit intimidating. "Child...I feel as if...you are the hero." "Hero of what?" A user of this had a very puzzled look. Mohammed revealed a scroll which had Gujavo writing of it. "What does this say, child?" "Um...Toyku residents vow to keep the kingdom the healthiest and wealthiest." "That is correct..." Mohammed said. User could read the oath that everyone in Toyku had to stand by...in Gujavo. "Yes...I feel as if you are the hero that we have called upon." Mohammed said. "You see, I live in another universe known as Denretyu. I live in a humble kingdom known as Toyku. Sadly, bad events have come upon us. One of my friends is about to be killed, the princess is gone, and since that, the king is throwing a tantrum. I came across a stone in a cove that a mysterious creature took from me. However, we need it to prevent some sort of plague we're going through because of magical monsters and...oh, never mind. An imp like you could never possibly understand our troubles. Thanks for wasting my time! Third period was about to start, and unfortunately User was about to be late for the first time in his life. Mohammed was getting nowhere with User, which he now calls an imp. User started running to class until Mohammed suddenly yelled, "WAIT. I'M SORRY. COME BACK, WE NEED YOU!" User came running back to Mohammed. "What do you want now?" "You are surely the hero we need! Come with me, my friend. Oh, I haven't properly introduced myself. I am Mohammed! You are...." "A user of this. And I'm gonna be late, I can't just leave school!" "Oh, I'm sure it's fine! And also, if you help us out...you'll be rich in our kingdom and...the king has a PRINCESS...that you may or may not be able to, oh, I don't know...marry." "But, I'm only 13!" "Hush!" Mohammed said. "Just come with me User. You'll be fine. Believe in your strengths...believe..." Mohammed took User to somewhere safe that they could talk. "So, Mohammed. Tell me more about Denretyu." "Ah, yes. Well, since you are the hero told of our prophecies, you hold the power of the three gods that created our land. Gena, Din, and Kafei. These three gods created our land and combined their powers to create a sacred stone that gives our universe special powers. With Gena's powers, she created the heavens. Kafei, with her rich soul, created all life form, and Din created all land and held a law all life form would support. And since we'll need all your power, I'm giving you this....the Kotorkea Gem. This gem will grant the holder sacred powers of the gods. Handle it with care. Unfortunately, because of the stone's great power, monsters have been summoned everywhere. They want their hands on the Gem and a mysterious golden stone I found in a secret cove with my lovely friend, Zed! This stone has a message of the language you translated back there. And only you can translate it at this point. This is our most desperate hour. This message might reveal something needed to put the monsters back where they belong...." Characters in Prologue and Chapter 1: mohammedroxx3 : Mr. Zed : PacmanandMariofan : MechaMento : Barathemos : A user of this : DenzGamer135 : Razor-987 : Keep in mind you guys will have bigger roles later on in the story. "Hmm....." A man by the name of Mohammedroxx3, Mohammed for short, was in a dark cove looking for treasures. Mohammed was an adventurous character that was eager to go anywhere as long as it was a thriller. Mohammed was along side his friend, Mr. Zed, who was Blacksmith for the king of Mohammed and Zed's kingdom...Mohammed and Zed were both together in the cove. Mohammed was tall and had wits and courage, and had special powers because of a special stone the kingdom shared...the Kotorkea Gem. This stone granted powers to everyone in Mohammed's kingdom. Even the king...Mohammed paused to find a gold stone that had an ancient code on it. "What's this?" Zed asked? "I have no idea...let's investigate it," Mohammed said bravely. The stone shined as Zed picked it up. Then they both heard an echoing scream. "Mohammed, you need to stop eating those pizza bagels if they're giving you stomach problems!" "That wasn't me," Mohammed replied. They then heard the scream again, this time closer. And closer. Suddenly, out of nowhere came a vicious looking creature that was drooling a pool! It was a wolf standing on its hind legs. As if it were a human. It had red eyes, sharp fangs, and a lot of fur. Then, the wolf skimmed towards Mohammed and revealed his sharp claws and scratched Mohammed on his arm. "Ah!" Cried Mohammed. There was a blood marks revealed, and they had to heal it. The wolf grabbed the gold stone from Zed and went out of the cove. That was the screaming beast. The blood marks revealed a message in a different language known as Gujavo. They knew a guy who could translate, however... Mohammed and Zed escaped the Cove. They had to get back to "Toyku Castle." Toyku was their kingdom, owned by king Razor-987. The kingdom produced beautiful plants, the greenest grass, and top notch security around the castle. Before entering the castle, they ran into PacManandMariofan! "Pac," Yelled Zed! "Thank goodness you're here. We need your help! Can you translate this? It's in Gujavo, and we know you can speak Gujavo fluently. "......." "Um...Pac?" Asked Mohammed? Pac had pink eyes, and he looked out of it. Pac couldn't say a word but stand there like a zombie. He was guarding the entrance to the castle, so they couldn't get in....Pac looked as if he'd been lobotomized...he was brainwashed..."What's going on?" Mohammed asked? Pac said nothing, so Mohammed and Zed just entered the castle to find the king throwing a tantrum, while the butler, MechaMento, was just standing next to his throne completely calm, holding a platter holding a seasoned turkey. "Sorry, guys, but since the princess has been missing, the king hasn't been able to keep his cool," said MechaMento still as calm as ever. "However, the king and everyone in the kingdom thinks Barathemos has done it. Look at poor Barathemos tied up, almost gonna be dunked in that boiling cauldron." "Let me go! I didn't kidnap the princess! It was a strange wolf that could stand on his hind legs!" "Not to mention," Mecha continuted, "that Pacman had been brainwashed by a mutant creature that is classified to be a prehistoric dinosaur...that can also stand." Mohammed was realizing all the havoc done in the kingdom. If it was not stopped, something worse would happen. He had an idea. "I know how to end this. If I can translate this scratched mark, I can find out what to do! The king won't know, because he and the residents are trying to kill Barathemos!" "Zed," Mecha said, "Mohammed should go alone. "But..." "No. You need to work full time as a guard, because it appears one of the guards has gone missing. Go...and Mohammed..that mark says...ye who is troubled in another universe must come to strike all enemies and get a bright stone to find out what sacred code is...to save Toyku." "That's it? Alright, I'll go through the portal to Earth." This was a whole new universe, and they could warp to other universes using colorful messes of portals. "Wish me luck..." Chapter 1: A New Hero "Haha. What do we have here?" A rough voice said. "He wants his books back!" A group of bullies were bullying a kid known as A user of this. "Give me back my book, DenzGamer135! I need it for my book report! "Well too bad!" A user of this was a kid that was known as the Whiz. He was a straight A student, being 13 years of age, he had glasses, which he got made fun of for a lot, and he was a very poetic mind and his maturity level is "off the chart" as parents say. A user of this was the bully magnet though, and his mother died at birth, so life has been very hard for him. A user of this has had thoughts of suicide at times, but has been stopped by his father, which is an alcoholic, and also abuses his own son. DenzGamer, the most popular kid in their school, West Ridge. He was super athletic, was really handsome, and never got any good grades, but he was still the ladies man, unlike A user of this, which did not care, because he was only 13, but Denz was 14. Denz was still depriving A user of this of his book, until...a figure that best describes Mohammed appeared and used his sword to scare Denz off by almost cutting his limbs off. Denz gave back the book, and A user of this was happy again. The savior of User was none other than Mohammed himself. User was scared to death by Mohammed, and Mohammed was a bit intimidating. "Child...I feel as if...you are the hero." "Hero of what?" A user of this had a very puzzled look. Mohammed revealed a scroll which had Gujavo writing of it. "What does this say, child?" "Um...Toyku residents vow to keep the kingdom the healthiest and wealthiest." "That is correct..." Mohammed said. User could read the oath that everyone in Toyku had to stand by...in Gujavo. "Yes...I feel as if you are the hero that we have called upon." Mohammed said. "You see, I live in another universe known as Denretyu. I live in a humble kingdom known as Toyku. Sadly, bad events have come upon us. One of my friends is about to be killed, the princess is gone, and since that, the king is throwing a tantrum. I came across a stone in a cove that a mysterious creature took from me. However, we need it to prevent some sort of plague we're going through because of magical monsters and...oh, never mind. An imp like you could never possibly understand our troubles. Thanks for wasting my time! Third period was about to start, and unfortunately User was about to be late for the first time in his life. Mohammed was getting nowhere with User, which he now calls an imp. User started running to class until Mohammed suddenly yelled, "WAIT. I'M SORRY. COME BACK, WE NEED YOU!" User came running back to Mohammed. "What do you want now?" "You are surely the hero we need! Come with me, my friend. Oh, I haven't properly introduced myself. I am Mohammed! You are...." "A user of this. And I'm gonna be late, I can't just leave school!" "Oh, I'm sure it's fine! And also, if you help us out...you'll be rich in our kingdom and...the king has a PRINCESS...that you may or may not be able to, oh, I don't know...marry." "But, I'm only 13!" "Hush!" Mohammed said. "Just come with me User. You'll be fine. Believe in your strengths...believe..." Mohammed took User to somewhere safe that they could talk. "So, Mohammed. Tell me more about Denretyu." "Ah, yes. Well, since you are the hero told of our prophecies, you hold the power of the three gods that created our land. Gena, Din, and Kafei. These three gods created our land and combined their powers to create a sacred stone that gives our universe special powers. With Gena's powers, she created the heavens. Kafei, with her rich soul, created all life form, and Din created all land and held a law all life form would support. And since we'll need all your power, I'm giving you this....the Kotorkea Gem. This gem will grant the holder sacred powers of the gods. Handle it with care. Unfortunately, because of the stone's great power, monsters have been summoned everywhere. They want their hands on the Gem and a mysterious golden stone I found in a secret cove with my lovely friend, Zed! This stone has a message of the language you translated back there. And only you can translate it at this point. This is our most desperate hour. This message might reveal something needed to put the monsters back where they belong...." Characters in Prologue and Chapter 1: mohammedroxx3 : Mr. Zed : PacmanandMariofan : MechaMento : Barathemos : A user of this : DenzGamer135 : Razor-987 : Keep in mind you guys will have bigger roles later on in the story. |
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Awesome job on that story pixel! You have one heck of an awesome skill as a writer! This is a very interesting story. I'm definitely looking forward to chapter 2 man. Keep on writing these awesome stories. |
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Wow man, I am at a loss for words on how to even begin to describe how I feel about this, this is just awesome, I like being the king, I think it fits XD. You have an awesome vocabulary and you really capture my attention by the way you describe the scenes and the characters in the story, I think it all fits together very nicely to make an awesome story. Overall excellent job man, i am going to favorite this thread because I am really looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the awesome work man! |
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Well um . Its Ok ..... don't really have much to say ... Awesome for a prolouge . N'stuff . |
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Well done pixel, I remember a lot of things I told you. and you felt so down about many things before...but, you see you found something else you are good at. just look at what you have done here. always remember chin up, look forward, always believe, no matter what happens and continue to fight. I am so proud, to have you as my friend. ^-^ PixelBrick : PixelBrick : |
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