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05-20-12 10:29 PM
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This is a story that is sort of a real life story.I hope you like it!



Chapter 1:Meeting My Love

As I got out of the car,I think to myself,"I wonder if I will make new friends?"Then,I walked in the door.I see some kids my age,but my eyes saw a boy that made my heart glow.I walk to him,trying to talk to him.But as soon as I got up to him,the bus got there.Everyone ran as fast as a torpedo that hit a bullet.As I got on the bus,my eyes open wide like they were about to rip  apart.There was 1 seat left.But that seat had.....the boy I liked.I stepped closer.And closer.And closer.Until I was right beside him.I closed and sat down.Then,the bus started.I opened my eyes and looked at the boy."Hi."The boy looked at me."Hey."I thought again,"So far so good." "What's your name?"the boy said.Um..Nina.Yours?" "Josh." "That's a cute name." "Thanks" "And..." "What?" "Um..um..I..I.." "You what?" "I......I like..." Right before I could say it,the bus stopped.

End Chapter 1



I tried my best to describe it.And I hope you guys like it!And I hope the series will catch on.  Please post on how you like this!

This is a story that is sort of a real life story.I hope you like it!



Chapter 1:Meeting My Love

As I got out of the car,I think to myself,"I wonder if I will make new friends?"Then,I walked in the door.I see some kids my age,but my eyes saw a boy that made my heart glow.I walk to him,trying to talk to him.But as soon as I got up to him,the bus got there.Everyone ran as fast as a torpedo that hit a bullet.As I got on the bus,my eyes open wide like they were about to rip  apart.There was 1 seat left.But that seat had.....the boy I liked.I stepped closer.And closer.And closer.Until I was right beside him.I closed and sat down.Then,the bus started.I opened my eyes and looked at the boy."Hi."The boy looked at me."Hey."I thought again,"So far so good." "What's your name?"the boy said.Um..Nina.Yours?" "Josh." "That's a cute name." "Thanks" "And..." "What?" "Um..um..I..I.." "You what?" "I......I like..." Right before I could say it,the bus stopped.

End Chapter 1



I tried my best to describe it.And I hope you guys like it!And I hope the series will catch on.  Please post on how you like this!

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Giegas : Thank you for sharing this, hmm... Is this one of your early stories? Have you been writing for very long?
If it's just for practice, more then anything else, then I'll have to say that this is a good start.

I like this because its currant narration is very much like (at least, it seems to me...) how "Nina" feels : Inexperienced, and nervous.
(Jeez, quite a compliment, eh? It doesn't sound like what I mean to say... Sorry if this offends you)

Anyway... I cant really add anything to this, so here is some advice that you won't need :
You'll obviously get allot better at this the more you do it... So quality's a short term problem, No worries there.
So just the usual really : You'll learn from practicing.

So do it because you enjoy doing it, never push yourself for inspiration, write at your leisure, and all will be well. Thanks for your time.

Giegas : Thank you for sharing this, hmm... Is this one of your early stories? Have you been writing for very long?
If it's just for practice, more then anything else, then I'll have to say that this is a good start.

I like this because its currant narration is very much like (at least, it seems to me...) how "Nina" feels : Inexperienced, and nervous.
(Jeez, quite a compliment, eh? It doesn't sound like what I mean to say... Sorry if this offends you)

Anyway... I cant really add anything to this, so here is some advice that you won't need :
You'll obviously get allot better at this the more you do it... So quality's a short term problem, No worries there.
So just the usual really : You'll learn from practicing.

So do it because you enjoy doing it, never push yourself for inspiration, write at your leisure, and all will be well. Thanks for your time.
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